Birthday time...

Happy birthday gothic_cowboy!

Story Revision

Ok, so I re-wrote the story I posted here in order to make it better. It's ten pages long, so if y'all have time, I'd appreciate some sort of feedback. I'm turning it in tomorrow.

With that said, I present to you...( Choices (v. 2.0) By: Me )

Thoughts? Questions? Comments? Suggestions? Did everything make sense?